单词拼写很棒,可考虑增加高级词汇的使用量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
Do you know Tom?He is a lovely and lively boy.He comes from Shanxi province.We study in Yatai primery school Class3 Grade1.We are deskmate too. He likes much food,such as vegetables,fruits,chocolate,and fish.Nonetheless like pork, sweets and green tea not.He is of hobbies, such as dancing,reading and playing the computer games. Due to he is extremely clever.Accordingly he is nothing but crazy about maths.He is attaching importance to maths. He not only addicted to the piano but also addicted to the Sun. He thinks it is fun to play the musical instrument. He played the piano at the concert in the The National Grand Theater when he was six.There is no denying that his performance is just extraordinary.I am proud with him. Especially he is frequently ready to help others. what's more he is passionate too. Tomorrow is his birthday.I will buy a present for him.Give him a pleasantly surprised. I am looking forward to playing well with him.He will become my lasting throughout life friend.