可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
Tom is one of my best friends.He is a clever,capable and versatile boy. He studies in NO.1 primery school and he studies real hard.The result has been in the forefront of the class. He especially likes mathematics, to the point that fascinated. At the same time, he of scientific knowledge very interested in, he liked to read, he read a lot of books, such as Grimm's fairy tales, forest reported, Chinese history, world geography. He is also addicted to music. His music is very good, he joined the school choir, he can play the piano, will play Sax. When he sings or practicing, she can be absorbed in. He thought playing musical instruments was very interesting. When he was six years old, he played the piano in the National Grand Theater Concert, not to deny that his performance is not ordinary, I think his music accomplishment half is talent, generally is his own efforts to form. He is a member of the class, she loves the class, often to help students, and students get along friendly. He played with me very well, we often together, whether in study or in life, he gave me a lot of help. Tomorrow is his birthday, I want to make a creative gift to him, give him a big surprise. I am looking forward to playing with him better, he will be my friend in my life.