句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;文中词汇使用较丰富,高级词汇使用要加强;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
Tom is one of my best friends.He is a clever,capable and versatile boy. He studies in NO.1 primery school.He studies real hard.The result has been in the forefront of the class. He especially likes mathematics, to the point that fascinated. At the same time he of scientific knowledge very interested in.He likes to read.He reads a lot of books, such as Grimm's fairy tales, forest reported, Chinese history, world geography. He is also addicted to music. His music is very good.He joined the school choir.He can play the piano, will play Sax. When he sings or practicing, she can be absorbed in. He thought playing musical instruments is very interesting. He played the piano in the National Grand Theater Concert when he was six..I think his music accomplishment half is talent, generally is his own efforts to form. He is a member of the class, she loves the class, often to help students, and students get along friendly. He played with me very well, we often together, whether in study or in life, he gave me a lot of help. Tomorrow is his birthday, I want to make a creative gift to him, give him a big surprise. I am looking forward to playing with him better, he will be my friend in my life.