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June 23rd, 2008 Dear Sir or Madam, I’m writing to apply for the position of volunteer interpreter for the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games. My name is Li Ming, 22-year-old boy. Now as a sophomore student in Beijing Normal University, and I have a good command of English. I am kind and friendly to other people, and always ready to help others. I have a keen interest in all kinds of sports activities. Therefore, I hope I can contribute my part to the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games. Thank you for your consideration to my application. I am looking forward to your early reply. Yours Sincerely, Li Ming