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first,i am chinese .the first place i want to go is great wall! it is so beautfull!the second one is dahuaishu,it is stand for my hometown! i think my frieng will like my hometown !Beijing is the capital of China with a long history. There are lots of places of interest, such as the Great Wall, the Palace Museum, and the Summer Palace and so on. Since it lies in the north of China, the winter here is long and it snows sometimes. Autumn is the best season in Beijing, for it is neither too cold nor too hot. One of the most famous traditional foods is Beijing (Roast)Duck. The 2008 Olympic Games will be held in Beijing. By hosting the Olympics, we”ll have the chance to let the world know more about China and Beijing. So, come to Beijing and you”ll enjoy it.