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Dear Grandma How have you been? How is your health? I didn't see you for a long time. I miss you so much. I still remembered the time when I was a child. You always stay beside me and told me many old stories. I enjoyed the time when I was growing. I had never told you that you are the most important relative in my life. You always tried to help me with my poor family. I still remembered the clothes you bought for me. At that time, no one has a wealthy life but in the poverty situation. But you still used your weakness to help me. You put the candy under the pillow when every time I was sick. And I knew there was always a superise for me. That is you my Grandma. When the first time I leaving you leaving our hometown, I knew that it's a long journey that I must be independent because you are getting old and I am growing up. I love you more than I can say. I always miss you. And you are the mainstay of me, When I in frustation, I always recall what you told me previsouly. I knew the way is not easy to be grow up.
