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There is a saying goes that ‘Where there is a will,there is a way’.A strong will can give us motivation to fight for a bright future. As we all know, many people want to succeed but they don't want to pay the price for greatness.Under such circumstances,failures can't be avoided.Only people who have a strong will have the courage to undertake those painful tasks and resist temptation,finally being successful. So it is with us students.As a college fesh man,I know 'No pains,no gains'.There is nothing other than studying hard can make me more equipped for the future,Without professional knowledge,I can't make my own contribution to the societ and gain successes. After all,nothing succeeds without a strong will.