拼写做的很棒,高级词汇可适量增加;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;从句使用很不错,再接再厉。
Living in an age when the adolescents are lack of the necessary guidance and supervision,we can never fail to figure out the fact that teenagers are become especially self-conscious. Under this circumstance,the youngsters are more likely to believe in what they have listened or seen instead of thinking twice before drawing their conclusions,which is pathetically and undoubtedly considered controversial or even unreasonable. The reasons why I insist on the viewpoint that we should never directly and irresponsibly come to conclusions only by listening or seeing mainly lie in the following two aspects. To begin with,it is a invariable law to every existence in the world that nothing will stay still even for just one second.So are the things happening around us. What we see or listen may be just some particular period of the development of things,which proves unstable and changeable. In addition,the perspectives we conclude just through se
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