作者使用词汇表达不都灵魂,需要多使用一些高级词汇;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用;文中句子偏简单,可增加从句使用量。
My friend is very beautiful,her names is lily.she loves cats and dogs.One day,she saw a cat on the street. It was very clelve.Lily wanted to hug it.Unfortunnately,she was injured and unexpected.In fact ,even if she was injured, she also was concerned about a lot of animals in danger.I think lily have a kindness on heart. Finally, I want to said:"You is my best and lovely friend! I'm very lucky because I have you. "