作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,高级词汇使用过少;可适当增加从句的使用;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
My friend is very beautiful,her names is lily.she loves cats and dogs.One day,she saw a cat on the street. It was very clever.Lily wanted to hug it.Unfortunnately,she was injured and unexpected.In fact ,even if she was injured, she also was concerned about a lot of animals in danger.I think lily have a kindness on heart. Finally, I want to express:"You is my best and lovely friend! I'm very lucky."