简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用。
My friend is very beautiful,her names are lily.she loving cats and dogs.One day,she saw a cat on the street. It was very clever.Lily wanted to hug it.Unfortunnately,she was injured and unexpected.In reality,even if she was injured, she also was concerned about a lot of animals in danger.I think lily has a kindness. Finally, I want to express:"You are my best and lovely friend! I'm very lucky Because I have you."