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My friend is very beautiful,whose names are lily,and loving cats and dogs.One day,she saw a cat on the street. It was very clever.Lily wanted to hug it.Unfortunnately,she was injured and unexpected.In reality,even if she was injured, she also was concerned about a lot of animals in danger.I think lily has a kindness. Finally, I want to express:"You are my best and lovely friend! I'm very lucky Because I have you."