单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;过渡词和衔接词使用欠丰富,层次欠清晰。
my friend's is Xiao Ma. People usually call him Ma. He has black hair. His has a pair of black eyes. It is very beautiful. He is very strong because he usually exercises. He likes play basketball and computer game. He likes help everyone who is difficulty. Everybody like her.