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my friend is very brave,he always help other people,he like read and travel,he has read some books,he is a good freind and teach in my heart,beacause he teach me some truth,we always talk about true or wrong in socity,i like to ask question to he,we are very friendly.but we have not met for ten years,i don't know where are you now