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When huaman society has come into an information age,people faced "Information Explosion",we may come to thecomclusion when we see or hear something,while it is unwise. Sometimes we may cheated by something what we see or hear.In my memory,one day I find my pen is disappeared afterclass which one my best friend send to me.I fond everywhere that I can remmerber,but i still not fond it.After that day,with depressed mood i came into the classroom,while i saw my pen in my classmate'desk.I tell him it's mime,unexpected he disacknoweldge,then i am angry and spoke loudly"i never want to see you".when i come back home ,my mother gave me the pen which i lost one.At that time ,i am to regret too say anything. After that,i know that draw a conclusion when see or hear something in unwise.
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