过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用。
When human society has come into an information age,person faced "Information Explosion",we may come to the conclusion when we see or hear something,while it is unwise. Sometimes we may be cheated by something what we see or hear.In my memory,one day I fond my pen disappeared after class which one is I like best.I fond everywhere that I can remember,but I still not fond it.After that day,with depressed mood i came into the classroom,while i saw my pen in my classmate'desk.I tell him it's mime,unexpected he disacknowledge,then I am angry and spoke loudly"I never want to see you".when I come back home ,my mother gave me the pen which I lost one.At that time,I am to regret too saying anything. After that,I know that draw a conclusion when we see or hear something is unwise.
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