文中从句数量过少;作者高级词汇使用比较准确,词汇表达较丰富,但仍需增加词汇积累;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
The annual summer vacation is coming,the children could alleviate ther mood ,in the light of own appetite.In my perspective,art museum is the best option.It has two advantages-enhance the thinking ability and enrich ther knowledge. The material is suitable for the kids on display at the museum of the specific characteristics of image considering ,befriends them to make the contribution between the concrete physical objects and abstract concepts ,which both