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My house is a medium apartment. It looks simple, but shows warm. We called it "Mother's Arms". My parents and I lives here. This is the sitting room. It is big. There are sofas, a tea table, a big side table and a smaller one. There is a dinner-table on the right hand and a piano on the left hand. We do the entertainment and have dinner here.This is my parents' room. It is nice. It has a large bed. It can holds three people. This is my room. It is smaller than my parents' room. I called it "Steph's Base", because it has all my memories and my equipment in here. Besides, it looks very "IKEA". Most of furniture are bought from "IKEA". Their comfortable designing style contracted me a lot. This is our house. Our comfortable "Mother's Arms". We love it.