文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅。
I'm very glad that you are going to visit my hometown.I hope you have a good time there. As we know,my hometown is a beautiful place and has a lot of kind people.and We all will be breath fresh air when you climb the small mountain.Of course,you eat kinds of food in the mountain.it's delicious for everyone.If you walk the narrow road in the country,you will find this view is attractive and never forgot to spend on this day, obviously,this is a very different place with a number of people in the city.no pollution and no noise,you will see the blue sky while you lie in the file,that is so pleased. I think I can't wait you to come here.