过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是高级词汇的积累;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩。
How Should Parents Help Children to Be Independent? Nowadays,there are more and more parents who help their children everything.It may be making the children's life easier just at that moment.But the parents can not live with their children all the life.What will the children do when their parents are not on this world?So,I think that is a bad thing.To be other words,parents should help children to be independent. At first,parents should let children do their things by themselves instead of helping them.However,in this world,children should have their own life.Then,if children have some troubles,parents should teach them how to deal with the difficulties instead of doing all things for children.Last but not least,if children have something they want to do or they love,parents should encourage and support them instead of saying to them that you should not do this because it does not fit you or it is too difficult to finish. The children's life is their own life,not the parents life.Parents should help children to be independent.