可适当增加复合句和从句的使用;采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;文章词汇使用比较恰当,高级词汇积累不足。
Do you meet this situation where you always draw conclusion immediately when you see something.when I was young,I did,but one thing changed me.I had a good friend,kara,a beautiful girl at my age of ten.one day,I heared someone say that she is a bad girl because she a thief.So,I left her and don't keep in touch with her.After 2 years ago, I got the truth that she is not a thief and just someone make a rumour who hates her .How stupid I am! My story show that it is not wise to make a conclusion right away,once we see and hear something.because the things we see and hear may not be true.if we conclude by that,we can fault. Believe truth and decide carefully,our life will be better.
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