可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错。
Do you meet this situation where you always draw conclusion immediately when you see something.when I was young,I did,but one thing changed me.I had a good friend,kara,a beautiful girl at my age of ten.One day,I heard someone say that she is a bad girl and a thief.So,I left her and no keep in touch with her.After 2 years ago, I got the truth that she was not a thief and just someone who hated her to make a rumour.How stupid I am! My story show that it is not wise to come to a conclusion right away, once we see and hear something.because things we see and hear may not be true.if we conclude by that,we can be error. Believe truth and decide carefully,our life will be better.
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