文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
I am very glad that you are going to visit my hometown,and wish you have a good time there. As you know,my hometown is a beautiful place,there are lots of kind people and some interesting things.In the morning,we go to see the place where the sun rise when we climbed the mountain,and we all breath the fresh air.You will feel the world is so fine.At lunch,you have been eating the delicious food in the countryside.and then you can talk about something with farmers.I believe it's pleasing while both of the culture constantly melt with the process.and then you have a good nap time so that you could have relaxed in the afternoon.In the afternoon,we go for a walk in the river.the water is refreshing and it's cool while you put your hands into the water.Of course,you see some butterflies dancing and birds singing in the tree.I'm sure you fall in love with this place.After walking about three hours we can go to somewhere else.such as In a word,this is a day in the countryside.I wish you are coming here soon.