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如今很多动物处于濒危状态, 请你分析一下造成很多动物处于濒危状态的原因。作为中学生, 提出保护动物的倡议。.
语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；能够熟练使用从句并合理分配；作者能较熟练地使用丰富的词汇，但请加强单词拼写的检查。
We have many lovely friends in world such as fishs and dogs and birds,but in recently more and more animal have disappeared we have so cute animal that should be protec them however a lot of people kill them for mony or food the most angily thing about it is that someone kill animal when he was feeling not happy because of this they can not be able to get into owns home I think that we need to protect animal form danger and stop businessman shooting them
