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如今很多动物处于濒危状态, 请你分析一下造成很多动物处于濒危状态的原因。作为中学生, 提出保护动物的倡议。.
语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；文中一些从句的使用为文章增色；词汇表达较灵活准确，高级词汇使用过少，另外注意文中个别的拼写错误。
We have many lovely friends in world such as fishes and dogs and birds,but in recently more and more animal have disappeared we have so cute animal that should be protec them however a lot of people kill them for mony or food the most angily thing about it is that someone kill animal when he was feeling not happy because of this they can't be able to get into owns home I think that we need to protect animal form danger and stop shooting them
