过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;可适当增加从句的使用;文中用词稍显贫乏,单词拼写方面也要加强。
It's not clever to draw a conclusion what you seeing or what you listening According to we harding make the report which said in our life that we can't belief what we see or what we listen if we only realize once.So we not only need according to the many result and many conclusion ,but also need many report which can make our draw a true conclution. In my opinion,On the contrary, I think we should reach the question according to the many seeing or listening what we see or listen. If we just to do that ,which is not fill.So on the other contrary ,which we should search for the person to ask how the problem start and what the problem cause.As for me ,I think if we all can do that we can be good at solver the best conclusion when we face what we seeing or what we listening. Finally,which is also import to us to solver this problem that we should not belief the perple only said .
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