文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;文中应增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;文中衔接词丰富。
From kindergarten to college life, Teachers are always a important part of our life.Not only did they teach us a lot of knowledge but also they teached us how to be a better person.It seems to me that teacher is a noble profession,and I want to a person who can give others help and who can live with many significances. Teachers are worthy to respect.They show selfless devotion of duty.The things what they did is more than they should do on duty.They treat students as their own kids,and help them to establish a correct outlook on life. I just want to be a teacher who is ordinary but great.