2005年1月英语六级作文真题:对病人进行捐助

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Due to overlooked heart abnormalities，sudden death triggered by physical activities in young people，who always are athletes，should prompt us to pay close attention. The causes of sudden cardiac death in young people vary，but the primary cause is the heart abnormalities，including hypertrophic cardiomyopathy，in which the myocardium becomes abnormally thick，making it harder to pump blood and often goes undetected，coronary artery abnormalities，long QT syndrome，an inherited heart rhythm disorder.Those cardiac disease often occurs as the results of a blunt blow to the chest and playing sports. Unexpected fainting and family history of sudden cardiac death may be a sign，a young person is at high risk of sudden cardiac death.Therefore，Some countries use the electrocardiogram to precautions，but some scientists didn‘t agree.If you are thefirst-degree relatives of the deceased，it's necessary to do a test for heart problems.In addition，if you are at risk of sudden cardiac death，talk to your doctor about whether you can participate in exercise or sports depends on your condition.