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nowadays,social networking services like msn and facebook and qq are very important popular,expecially among yong people.they enjoy making friends on the internet,this has caused a heated debate as to whether it is wise to make friends online.in fact,the advantages of making frienfs online outweigh the disadvantages firstly,it has a good memory and a better memory than human.before the old ones,it is heavy and big.it can just do the simple thing. it is valuable and enjoyable experience for its small and light.runs faster and better.as long as it existed it will become mpre popular.some p claim that it has become a important part of people,s lives