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Jenny is a good friend of mine. Now she is studying aborad . She likes to go shipping with me in China. she always cares her healthy more .She eats lots of vergetables and friut, drink milk and some water. sometimes she does yoge three times a week after class. Every day she wears smile on her face .she thinks happy to do everything well and enjoy life.