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I have a good friend. Her name is Liu Yuixi.Shi is six years old.she is beautful girl. Then she have big eyes and smour nose.She have long hear.She have a sister.She english study very good.She like eat apple and banana.She a little tall.she by bus go to soolch every day.This is my good friend.