语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;能够运用简单的从句,但不熟练;作者能词汇表达较准确熟练,但请仔细检查词汇的拼写。
in the passage the writer want to tell us that we need't to afarid of growing up although we must to face many problem in the future and we must undertake pressure from work and famile it is a so glad when we are gowing up therefore we must try to find happiness while growing as far as i concerned when you grow up an adult there have no denying the fact that you wii have a lot of problem and pressure but this is a experience we may nerve avoid be-coming old but we can leave a beautiful meromy in our life so long as you are full of confidence and not worriy about anything