小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

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I in dask look Jim's potoer , Jim'family have four people.Father,mother,he and sister.He mother very beaterful and kind,she is a teacher and she cooking very good.So,jim is a little fat .he father is a doctor and he sister is a doctor too.But Jim wan to do a peilman.Beasor peilman very dare.