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In the picture we can kown that smorking is hamful to our body and our world's econmy .Every year 20 percent people will die of smorking in the world .It is about 3million .About 200billion dollars will waste . As we all kown.Smorking is danger to us .First of all ,It make us waste money. Secondly. It In the end but last In my opinon
