行文较为流畅,作者文中过渡词使用的不错;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且检查文中的拼写错误;采用了一些简单的从句。
as we all konw ,it is not wise to make a conclusion according to what you see or look. there are numeours examples can prove the view first,everyone knows that it is a different thing to ponder a people who is good or bad so what should we teenagers do? as far as i am concerned,
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