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如今很多动物处于濒危状态, 请你分析一下造成很多动物处于濒危状态的原因。作为中学生, 提出保护动物的倡议。.
语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；注意文中个别的句子错误；文章用了较为丰富的词汇，高级词汇略显单薄，同时注意单词拼写的检查。
Recently the problem of kill animal has been brought into focus we have so beautiful animal that we need to protect them but a lot of animal has being shooted by someone who desire to earn money and get meat from animal most people seem to think that killed animal whether good or not it is nothing abou them they are not aware of it is important thing about to prize animal as well as we have a duty to restain some people from shooting animal Therefore we need take measure to reduce possible troubles and avoid damage in future the world compose of human ,plant,animal and someting other thing
