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如今很多动物处于濒危状态, 请你分析一下造成很多动物处于濒危状态的原因。作为中学生, 提出保护动物的倡议。.
语句间的衔接成分用的不错，同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富；注意文中个别的句子错误；文中词汇较灵活，但要注意积累高级词汇，拼写错误也要注意。
Recently the problem of kill animal has been brought into focus we have so beautiful animal that we need to protect them but a lot of animals has being shooted by someone who desire to earn money and get meat from animal most people seem to think that killed animal whether good or not it is nothing about them they are not aware of it is important thing about to value animal as well as we have a duty to restain some people from shooting animal Therefore we need take measures to reduce possible troubles and avoid damage in future the world compose of human ,plant,animal and something other thing
