文中词汇表达贫乏,但是单词拼写做的不错;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Everyone have friends.In the school,we well mack many friends.But,just a little well become good friends on we life. I have a good friend.His name is Tom.He is so pretty,so i like him so much.We play together every day.We help each other.Sometimes,we well fight for something. But,this is true friendship. In my life,friends are very important.