高一英语作文模拟题:我的家乡

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my name is zhouxiaojing,i live in taiyuan.taiyuan is my hometown.and i love my hometown very much. ten years ago,my hometown had so many trees,and fenhe is very beautiful.but our house had a little small,and there is not have smart sofa.and my parents are not have lots of money. but now,my hometown has many buiding,they are very tall and very beautiful.but i don't like the buidings.because there are many cars,and we can't see our trees,our fish...... i am vrey unhappy,i hope my hometown will be more and more beautiful .please help our hometown by ourselvse.