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I have three schools in my class career.The impressive one is my college school,which is named South Center University,and it is located in WuHan in HuBei Province.I ever had lived here four years.The library of the school is very fame,and you can find any the book what you want.The other cause of my favourite is that we can see many sakura flowers in the school.Everybody knows,sakura is born in Janpan,but to be a student in this school,we can see and smell the flowers remain within doors.I'm pround of my collage school .If you are interesting with my school,welcome you to visit it,and I will very pleasure to lead you see around my ever school.