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文中应适当增加从句和长难句的使用;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨;作者平时练习中应扩充词汇量,注意几处拼写错误。
The picture on the left shows a man,on his face write a name--Beckham,a famous football super star.And the picture on the right shows a young man is getting a haircut,at300RMB.to make himself look like Beckham.From these two pictures,I think more and more people ,specially young people, to express their idolworship in a public and expressive way. It is a popularity that to show their idolworship in a public and expressive way among young people.Several factors can weight heavily for this phenomenon.On the one hand, with the opeing-up policy booming ,Chinese will accept more and more culture and and different people ,which makes them more easily effected . On the other hand ,the young people now can get many infomations through the social media and Internet .Compared with the post young people,they know more about their idol whereever they come from Some expert concer that such shallow idolworship will damage the growth of young people on mental and physical aspects .But I think it is not a big problem ,we can solve it by guiding them and educating them properly .