语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;熟练使用了一些长难句;用词丰富,高级词汇的积累还有很大提升的空间。
As Chinese teenagers, especially living in traditional chinese family,are usually used to learn an opion or commentary by their parents or schools teacher without thought deeply by themselves. So, there are a lot of person who always like making his or her conclusion at once when they listen something and see something which are not so wise. for instance, there is a universal phnomenent exit in recently year that crowds of people who enjoy surfing in the internet often get some informations by others .example , a fans saw a message that a superstar he like did some bad thing , so he make a conclusion that the superstar is a bad people .even he like him very much before , he decided not to like him and listen his song anymore without looking for more evidence. another instance , a lot of people include me always identify a girl or a boy who we doesn't know forehand is good or bad only by other peoples . now, when I grow eventually , I realized that we shouidn't define one people whether he or she is kind or bad before we talk with them and contact with them. in short ,it's not a good and wise behavior for us .we should make a conclusion by us thought through many reasons instead of what we see and listen.
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