语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;文章词汇使用较为恰当灵活,希望能更熟练地使用高级词汇作者句法知识扎实,可适当增加从句的使用。
As Chinese teenagers, especially live in traditional Chinese family,are usually used to learn an opinion or commentary by their parents or school's teacher without thought deeply by themselves. So, there are a lot of people who always like making his or her conclusion at once when they listen something and see something which are not so wise. For instance, there was a universal phenomenon exit current year that crowds of person who surfing the internet often get some information by others .example, most fans looked up a message about a superstar who they like do some bad things, so they draw a conclusion that the superstar is a bad people .even he like him very much before, he decided not to like him and listen to his music anymore without looking for more evidences. Another instance, a lot of people include me always identify a girl or a boy who we don't know before is good or bad only by others. In short,it's not a good and wise behavior for us .we should reach a conclusion by us thought through many causes instead of what we see and listen only.
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