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The many goods have existed on excessive packaging so far.For instance, clothes swathed in tissue paper,placed in cardboard box and finally wrapped in well-designed plastic bags,imported bottles of grape wine packed in wooden boxes.The reason why it appears? The first of reason is the rapid development of the society in material things.With the excessive competition in the business,and the merchants try to come with all kinds of ideas to attract customer attention.The second people have formed a general consensus already during the festival. Afterwards the merchants make full use of cultural psychology what is becoming a mainstream in festival virtually. In my first of view, the excessive packaging is not solely waste the source of nature and affect the people's lifestyle to some extent.In aspect,the teenager interprets luxury atmosphere in society as a fashion,this is not welcome.So it's necessary to take measures for us, such as we should to raise awareness of people in public that the excessive packaging didn't equal high quality.And the government should that issued some policies to restrict excessive packaging.