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With the development of the technology , the impact of the internet on interpersonal communication has become much greater. In my opinion , it has both brings into advantages and disadvantages. As we know ,the internet has made our interpersonal communication more convenient and diversified, faster and more interesting. We could use internet to keep in touch with our companions and acquaintances and definitely strengthen the relationship . Imagine that you were an executive of Yahoo and wanted to keep in touch with your colleagues, you could use the Email and Skype to achieve this. How convenient it would be. Everything has one bad side , the internet is not an exception. Nowadays, more and more people are indulged in chatting online. These people are called indoors men. They seldom hanging out with their friends and acquaintances and was afraid of opening interpersonal communication with strangers. To be honest , this is a serious problem in China now. We need to figure out which way is more important in our interpersonal communication. We should try to make more friends in the real world, not in the internet.
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