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Dragon Boat Festival is a traditional festival in China,it has been celebrating by Chinese people for more than 2000 years.In lunar May 5th Poeople often do lots of traditional activities to celebrate this day. It is said that in the warring states period of China,a loyal officier named Qu Yuan couldn't bear the corrupt states of his country and suicided himself by dropping into the river.People in this country felt very sad about his death and they didn't want the fish to eat Qu Yuan's body.So they went boating to seek Qu Yuan's boay and dropped the rice-pudding into the river because they believed if the fish ate the rice-pudding they won't eat Qu Yuan's body.Graduately, the custom was kept and every Chinese people in the lunar May 5th would eat rice-pudding and go to dragon boat race.Traditional Chinese rice-pudding is made of rice,Chinese date,and bamboo leaf.Fragrant rice is covered by the bamboo leaf.In addition,people often put the mugwort in front of their house hoping to eliminate the whole family's disaster. As far as i'm concerned, the dragon boat festival is a national festival in China.People do the same things together-eating rice pudding,honoring one person, and feel happy and warm in that day.