拼写做的很棒,在平时练习中注意词汇量的积累;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色。
As we grow up,we encounter with many people and we make many different friends.With the different degree of studying and the difference of choosing careers,the financial disparity is gradually various.As for me,whether you are rich or poor,it is no matter. Firstly,everyone is equal.We have the same rights.Don't look down upon the low incomersor feel ashamed about yourself when you don't have a great salary.Secondly,money is not the way to define who is your friend and who is not.The world is changeable, and you will never know what will happen next time.If someone treat you as a friend because of your money,then when you lose your money,definitely,you will lose your friend,if you still call them a true friend. So don't take money so serious when you make friends with others.The world is variable,there are so many other things for you to chart with,such as hobbies,TV programs and beautiful scene.Above all,financial don't disparity affects friendship.