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My views on Online Shopping Nowdays,it is more and more popular for people to go shopping online .All my opinions about online shopping are as follows. On the one hand, online shopping has many advantages. first of all,we can save our time .because we do not need to go to the mall. we only need click the mouse. second we can acquire more informations about all kinds of goods that we want to buy. and we also can buy something that we can not buy in the location .last but not the least,it's very convient for us to go shopping on the internet. The shop on Internet,for example taobao.com,360buy.com are open for almost 24 hours a day so we can buy something we want at any time if we like. What's more, we needn't to wait in a queue. However,on the other hand,online shopping also has many disadvantages.for example,we can't see the things while we are shopping. so we are not sure whether they are good or not. Besides, we can't enjoy the happiness of shopping with our friends. So I think that we can go shopping online ,but we can not give up to go shopping with our friends.We can go shopping online ,when we need to buy many goods or we do not have enough time to go shopping with friends .if we have time ,please try your best to go shopping in the mall.
