文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;简单句稍微有点多,可适当增加从句使用;文章用了较为丰富的词汇,高级词汇略显单薄,同时注意单词拼写的检查。
It's known to us that smoking is harmful to our health,also bad to environment. Smoking,which have an influence on these pelple who is never smoking,is able to lead to lots of deseases such as lung cancer.The probability of passive smokers even higner than smoker.Some people think it's cool to smoke,and others considering smoking can refresh himself.Nowadays,It's a great progress to us that the flag don't smoke have been hung in more and more public place.We should make lots of efforts in order to our health to forbid people smoking in public.
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