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As shown from the material some local college students hire cleaners to do cleanings which should do by themselves.However,as far as I'm concerned,college student should not hire cleaners. First of all, do cleanings is basic life skill for human-being,what can he or she does even if can not do universal things. Secondly,college student go for college not only for learn new knowlege, but also learn how to be a real man.learn to be independent,learn to hoe to live by themselves.Last but not the least,hire cleaners is seemed like waste their parents money,if they can not live independent like do some basic living-skills,is there any meaning to go for a college? Take all consideration into conclusion, students should not hire cleaners for themselves to develop their dependent.
